Part One: Shipwrecked
Ryan stumbled away from his shipwrecked crew, deeper into the dark, gloomy, forest hoping to find help on the unknown crash site.
It’d been roughly 14 minutes since Ryan started exploring the place, he’d found no life whatsoever, but, he’d found a very oddly shaped cave for shelter.
Ryan headed back to the crew to bring them there. It was a long way, but they eventually got there. The crew walked in, not saying a word about how eerie it was.
But then something happened…
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Part Two: The Attack
There were three dim flashes of grey, and the red substance known as blood, spilled out to the floor creating a puddle, it was the blood of his now dead crew. Frozen in terror he fell to the ground on his knees, and let out a very questionable scream.
Good choice of adjectives to describe (oddly, eerie, gloomy), active verbs (frozen, stumbled, explored).
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